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Subject:Post Card Haiku
Time:03:59 am
I heard you can't trust
no one around her she said
I nod silently

be quiet and drive
"shhhh," I implored silently
just want to arrive

aren't you proud to be
the hunter and not the prey
you hold your hands tight

empty gas station
sign reads "wanted lost god"
but I know better.

from this old entry of mine, although the poem is itself older than the entry. I later rewrote this as a song with different lyrics, mostly around the "aren't you proud to be the hunter" line. The "wanted: lost god" line comes from when my friend eden and I were watching The Usual Suspects and they exit the initial police interrogation and McManus is leaning against a lightpole with a "WANTED: LOST DOG" sign taped to it, and Eden turns to me and says "I had a great idea!" and i say "wanted: lost god?"

I never did send out that particular post card. And now O'Reilly doesn't do that with their books anymore. Man, that annoys me.
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mightymonju
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Time:2004-07-14 06:07 pm (UTC)
I like it, but I'm having trouble deciding if it's one poem or 4 different ones.
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discogravy
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Time:2004-07-14 11:17 pm (UTC)
it's one poem, made up of four haiku-like snippets.
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discogravy
Subject:actually, the answer is:
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Time:2004-09-03 07:52 am (UTC)
yes.
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